Quest Power Shower

Quest Power Shower

Evaluation of comment and criticism, please?

I wrote this poem about the book we do for my school. Best and highest rated won 50 $ Wal-Mart gift cards and it placed only in the poem so you get satisfaction from it. But I want to win, to show my school that I have talent. So I need to evaluate, comment and criticism to say what would make it even better .. oh you and I must honestly and i titles .:::::::::::::::::::: Lie, lost, lonely, in this one and only generation, people call the United Nation. On Questionable Quest for Power, Thefore Everyone will Aquiesce, I will fight with ovewhelmed shower. Day after day deals with Dread and courage and tenacity, all recall these conversations when everyone lied, although we know that one day all coherence. alone on a beautiful day like this, now been delivered, I will not miss, Dodging Drama, defined as an explosive grenade.

Well ... if you want to do this poem that may have a chance after This will require a very specific title the first line should be rewritten as Thus: lonely, Lying, lost in this "one and only" people call generation UN. Aquiesce must be taken because this word is entered in the diction of the voice. consistency used incorrectly ... Do not use that word. The end does not seem to make endpoint ... or poem is too short or just not quite grasped what I want to say ... Political War poems are not usually my thing. as read this poem I can not I see it as a victory. A nation that is not Incorporated ... what? Person in War or not war "Dodging drama which is determined by a grenade? If you want To do this poem better ... should be compared on the day of soldiers in War a day per person in your normal day to-day society. Then you can show that the nation is either separated or combined .... anyway hope to give you some assistance. I am your lines rhyme throughout time I /?